Timothy P. Callahan

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Daredevil, how I would have ended it (Major Spoilers!!!)

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So, major Daredevil spoilers here so, tread with caution!!!!

 

 

 

 

I enjoyed the Netflix show Daredevil a lot. It had a very quick start that built gradually into a great superhero/character study.  It was a show I couldn't wait to watch the next episode of. It felt like it was building to a fantastic finish but, when the finish finally came, I felt let down. It was like a football player fumbling the ball on the 1 yard line just as he was about ready to score.  I know I'm probably alone in this, most people who watched the show thought it was great and loved the ending. I am not one of those people. I thought the ending was just, meh.

The main problem I had with it was a simple one. The Kingpin, Wilson Fisk. I knew he was evil, I knew he did bad things, but I felt he wasn't the typical bad guy, that he had some honor, that he was actually better than your typical bad guy. I got the feeling that, if not for a tragic upbringing, he might have actually turned out to be a good guy. They made me care for him. They made me see him as a compassionate human with some major anger issues. He was the clear bad guy, but he was a bad guy with some depth.

That depth got taken away in the last episode when they made him just the run of the mill, I own everyone cause I'm rich and I can hire anyone I want to help me escape because, I'm rich, bad guy. The final assault on his van with FBI guys killing cops was just silly. It didn't ring true to me. Sure, Wilson Fisk killed, but he always made sure people thought he was good guy, this made him such a bad guy, made everyone know he was a bad guy, that it rang false to what was built. Wilson Fisk would have found a better way to get out of it. As it is, it was a cliched trope that I personally can't stand. 

So, okay, how would I have ended it you ask? (Or didn't, whatever.)

Here's what I would have done.

Everything up to the point were they start arresting people keep. That's all good stuff.  After the scene with Foggy, Karen and Matt celebrate the arrests fade out. 

Fade back in with the title 8 Months later. 

Matt's standing in shadows in his new Daredevil costume (which we can't see yet) watching the TV. A reporter is talking over a recorded image of Fisk getting out of prison. His comments that he always knew the truth would come out and that he was innocent of all charges. (See, what this does is show that the law, something Matt and Foggy talk about all the time, can be corrupted because we all know that Fisk simply bought his freedom.) 

Matt puts the mask on and runs out of his apartment.

Cut to Foggy and Karen drinking, talking about how Fisk simply bought the best lawyers, the judges, and jury to get off. (In fact, that might actually be cheaper than buying a personal army to kill a bunch of cops to rescue him.) 

The next scene is Fisk standing in his apartment looking out to the Hell Kitchen, we can see that he's thinking about his next move. We hear a commotion from outside, two guards are thrown into the room and Daredevil, in his new costume, is standing there, a line of unconsciousness guards behind him. 

Daredevil and Fisk banter about the law, how money will always get him off, how he's going to go after everyone Matt cares about. Matt tells him he's done with the law, that he's going to stop Fisk right here and right now. After they banter they fight. It's a brutal fight that tears the apartment apart.

In the end Matt has a chance to kill Fisk but he doesn't, and instead he uses a move that Stick taught him that puts Fisk in a coma, one he may never get out of. Then, he leaves.

The last shot is of Matt, Karen and Foggy watching the news as Fisk is taken out of his apartment in a coma. Foggy looks at Matt, not sure how he feels about what Matt did. Karen is sad, but also expresses she's happy that Fisk got what he deserved. Matt's quiet, not talking, contemplating what he did and how he could move forward.

I know, that sounds a bit like how the movie Daredevil ended, but it's just my first draft, I'm sure we can change some stuff.

My point is, make the ending follow the theme of the show. The theme of law and vigilantism. They ending they gave us didn't do that, it just gave us a typical bad guy and I didn't want that, I wanted the ending to have more meaning. 

 

My characters, not me

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I'm currently writing a story where one of the characters is a raging racist who hates the fact that the government gives money to the poor and wants us to deport all immigrants and build a giant wall on the border between the US and Mexico. He's an unapologetic, gun toting member of the NRA and doesn't want the government to tell him to do anything. He hates authority and will complain about everything to anyone at anytime. 

I have another character, his son actually, who says his father's just a typical right wing, Fox news watching redneck.

To be honest, I'm not sure which character I'm more fearful of being associated with, the bigot or the son who calls his bigoted father a redneck. The reader doesn't know me, doesn't know my views, doesn't know who I am in any way other than what's on the page. I'm sure they can probably see the father as an exaggeration, or something I'm trying to mock, but I'm afraid they might see the son as me, who does mock his father for his views. The truth is, I'm neither but, unless I stop the story to tell the reader, "hey, these are just characters, not me. I mean, they came from my brain but they aren't me. Okay? As long as you understand that I'll let you continue reading the story."

I never write a character wondering if people will confuse me for that character but, if I were honest, I do read stories where I wonder 'is that what the author really thinks?" Guess it's just an occupational hazard.

 

 

Remember the little things

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Big events in your stories need to happen. You need to have the bad guy and the good guy fight it out on a river a lava while volcanos are exploding around you.  Your story needs that (or, you know, something not as dramatic) to happen. In order to get to those moments you need to remember to do the small scenes first. I think it's the small scenes that trips up most writers because, let's face it, it's much more fun to write the lava lake showdown than it is to write an uneventful dinner between characters. 

But, that dinner needs to happen too. Two characters need to talk about nothing. A character needs to stare out into space just to think about the events that have unfolded. I has to happen and, until you master of those scenes, the stories you write won't be fun to read at all. 

What I'd like to do in 2015

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I guess the first thing I need to do in 2015 is to actually start writing in this blog. I don't feel motivated to write often because, well, I don't think anyone will read it but, that shouldn't stop me from doing it because, as a writer, I need to find reasons to write and people not reading what I write isn't an excuse to not write.  Also need to work on writing really long sentences.

I want 2015 to be a good year, not just for me but for everyone. I want to see the world become a more open and better place. I want people to start treating each other well. I want to turn on the news and not see bad news about one thing or the other. I want to see people living in harmony and love. Yeah, we all know that's not going to happen so I might as well just concentrate on what I want for myself.

I want to sell more books. I want to maybe get a table at a convention this year to see what that's like. My goal is to sell 50+ paperback books, don't care which books as long as the total adds to 50. I hope to have three paperback books printing and in my hands before the summer. Maybe that should be my first goal, get all my books in paperback format and in my hand, then look to sell them.

I want to write more. Not sure how much more I can write. 2014 was a very good year for me writing wise, got a lot of stuff that I need to filter through and get ready to publish. I hope to have my newest novella, Scrapper's Hope, out by the end of January. I'm working on my second Evoulitionite book which I hope to have ready by the end of the year, maybe before Nano gets started in November. It's a long book so it'll take me a while to get it ready.

So, writing wise, I'm looking forward to 2015. Hopefully it'll be a successful year! And, if it's not, well, 2016 is only 12 months away so, we'll try it then.

 

My Critique rules

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Over the years I've tried to create a set of rules I always use when I critique. Rules I sometimes wish everyone would use when they read my stuff. Like all rules your millage may vary and you might not agree with them. These are my rules and I like them.